Nope, that won't work. I'll give you some short answers and then point you to some concepts and reading.
First the drawing implies a ground plane but only on side at a time. You're going to have directionality issues. Also, your drawing shows no lengths so no idea which band you're tuned for. Finally, you're creating a relationship between active elements and passive ones that will create a rather bizarre signal.
I love antenna design. It is my personal favorite aspect of amateur radio. I also love experimentation and I did notice that you built your own first antenna. But, as with most arts and skills, think martial arts, think fighter jet flying, think surgery; any of those require the basics first. Even if you have already built one, and especially if you are keen on building more, I would first study up on, and practice with, simple, basic, true and tried designs. I'm not saying you have to buy them, you absolutely can, and there are some amazing ready-to-use designs out there, but think about it. Right now you want to get on the air and have fun. Why not do it with the best possible equipment first? Then, once you're on the air and loving it, you experiment, but you do so after having read some of the antenna books, some of which are masterpieces. There are some that are geared towards theory, others are more DIY oriented. There are VHF/UHF books vs. HF ones. There are specific apartment dweller books, vs. the large arrays or super-high towers. Take your pick based on your personal interests and start experimenting away.
Here is a simple, available, not too expensive option on the, ready-to-use antenna front: https://amzn.to/3OXMEkB. There are many others. Just Google 2m 6m combo antennas and you'll have them at your fingertips. As far as books are concerned, if you are an antenna nut like me, the reference is: https://www.arrl.org/arrl-antenna-book. Again, many many others, some maybe even better, but this is a go-to, must-have-in-your-library book.
As with all advice, I may be completely off the mark and if I am, apologies, but hopefully some of this response will get you closer to getting on the air actively and with great success.
73
Jim